Blessings - Poem

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Darcava
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Blessings - Poem

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Blessings

Funny how someone can take for granted,
That which you dream of,
Abusing a gift,
You would cherish.

While they distress over it's inperfection,
You relish in those unique impurities,
Which add character,
A dream to light up your life,
Envy consumes the soul,
Yet all you can do is watch and dream,
Of what you may someday hold.

A different take,
Full appreciation of your wish,
Manifesting is your true comfort,
Hoping that one day you can change the world;
To accept these 'flaws',
As you do,
And to see the beauty within them.
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Darcava
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Re: Blessings - Poem

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The beauty of this poem is that it does not specify the dream and can be applied to any wish ^_^
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Re: Blessings - Poem

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It's nice.^^
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Re: Blessings - Poem

Post by kukutaru_ookami »

Good message but I couldn't feel the beat and seemed to be more of a free verse, which is awkward to read. Again I like the message but if in the given form the message is given it doesn't have as a strong an impact in my mind.
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Re: Blessings - Poem

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Wow. That was Really Awesome =D>
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