Sweet Silence

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Sweet Silence

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[Dreaming Of...]
Alone in this lonely room
No thoughts fill my head
And my emotions have deserted my tears

[You...]
I try to get up
I try to want to get up
But again, I roll over and go back to sleep

[Wheverever You Are.]
My dreams are filled with those I left
Wishing to be forgotten by some
Unforgotten dream
And as I dream
The tears play back once more

[I Never Wanted...]
I open my eyes
And looking into the darkness
All I can hear is silence

[To Hear It...]
I take so little solace from it
But its all the solace I'll get

[That Deafening Silence.]
For my hearts been ripped out
And has left a hollow pit

[Don't Leave Me Alone Here...]
Its monday
And I'm already giving up

[Let Me Belong Here With You.]
Tuesday tomorrow
And I'm not ready to get back up

[Just Don't Let Me Go Like This.]
Roll over and go back to sleep
Maybe later I'll be able to weep again
For what I've done

[Why Can't You Hear Me?]

[Am I Really So Weak?]

[Maybe I'm Better Off This Way...]


But that was never the question, was it?

Are you really better off without me?

[I Hope Someday You'll Hear Me.]
Please, I am but a smol potate.

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Re: Sweet Silence

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2 and 4 are good. The other ones have potential but are too short and don't seem to go anywhere.
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2 and 4? Could you please elaborate?
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I don't know what you're talking about, I thought it was a poem as a whole, something that has cemented you to a single thought of weakness. A missing effect from one person to another. I know what this is about.
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Its one poem as a whole, but you can also look at it as two poems, if you only read the italicized portion as one.
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Nice Poem
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Nia wrote:I don't know what you're talking about, I thought it was a poem as a whole, something that has cemented you to a single thought of weakness. A missing effect from one person to another. I know what this is about.
Respect his opinion..

Pretty good, Dreaming. :)
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Thanks, Kage and Iris. =]

Is there anything I can do to make it better? I don't do poetry often, and when I do, the tones and way the poem is read seems to change with every one, so I really don't know if I've done a good job or a bad one.
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You've...done a good job...whenever you do poetry.....it turns.......out very good.......you......always put.....a.....lot of heart......into each piece........



I...have to go.....
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Thank you...
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Dreaming Awake wrote:Its one poem as a whole, but you can also look at it as two poems, if you only read the italicized portion as one.
Yeah. That's what I thought. It's actually very good.
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Thank you, Taylor. =]
Please, I am but a smol potate.

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Dreaming Awake wrote:Thank you, Taylor. =]
You're very welcome. ^^
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