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here is a song me and my band wrote. i just wanted to post it here to get opinions and see if it need revising. if you could, just based of the lyrics, could you rate it out of 5? 5 bieng the best, one bieng the worst? thank you, and hope you enjoy!

"tribute"

(Give me your hand,
Death has gone and you will follow
Immortal man, suffering so full of pain)
Clear and bright, was one born of light
Dank and dead, the other belongs to night

Raise your soul and taste salvation
(Tonight we fight)
Blood so deep, suicide tonight

God has came and killed you
To him you should have died
Punishment from courage
He has closed his only eyes tonight

[Repeat from the top once]

All hell is born, unholy day
He has risen from the grave
You took his love, you took his gift
Feel the power of a broken man
Crestfallen man

Tonight I will come and release my soul
Into the night of the old
A punishment sent from the damned
A suffering that no one should know
Into the night of the old
Tonight I will release my soul

Where is your god? What saves you now?
This time we stand, now fallen to his birth
From his soul he cries out to feed
Death is now here follow and we shall meet

Tonight I will come and release my soul
Into the night of the old
A punishment sent from the damned
A suffering that no one should know
Into the night of the old
Tonight I will release my soul

Nice job!

.......AWSOME!

thanks guys!

Its very good. A little bit "DEATH AND DESTRUCTION" overload for my taste though. In order for to fully evaluate it, I need to understand what kind of band you play in. What genre of music do you play? Very nice tho.

we play mostly metal and classical rock.

okay then, 4/5

OniRuroKen wrote:Its very good. A little bit "DEATH AND DESTRUCTION" overload for my taste though. In order for to fully evaluate it, I need to understand what kind of band you play in. What genre of music do you play? Very nice tho.

lol.

Woot woot aoh