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Because I Think I Deserve It (By: My Sister =O)

Posted: Jul 20, 2007 5:07pm
by Biki
Because I think I deserve it....


I think I deserve it

I think I deserve to feel it

to feel that love

when you said you loved me

can you show me

can I feel it

can I see it

can I hear it

like you used to let me feel it

like you used to let me see it

because I think I deserve it

can you call me baby

like I used to call you baby

when you used to call me baby

when I tried to call you baby

you said not to call you baby

I think I deserve it

can you hug me when I say hello

like you used to hug me

when you used to love me

can you kiss me

like you used to kiss me

when you used to miss me

when it didnt have to be a lie to miss me

when you used to kiss me

before you couldnt kiss me anymore

before you turned away

when I tried to kiss you

you cant kiss me anymore

I mean I feel like I deserve it

can you please me

like i please you

like i try to please you

like i TRY to please you

like i love to try to please you

can you love to try to please me

like i love to try to please you too

a favor always asked for me to give to you

that same favor never really given to me

as it was always given to you

I think I deserve it

when I cry

can I have your shoulder

can I have you there to wonder why

like when I cried that night

you didnt want to know why

why I cried that night

I deseve it

can you say I love

you

when I say I love

you

Im scared to say I love

you

when you never say I love

you back to me

when you used to hold me

before it got complicated

you decided

when you decided

that you decided

WE never decided

when you didnt want me

like you used to want me

when you lied to me

you were never happy with me

you used to want me

like you used to want

me

because I think I deserve it

because I think maybe

You never deserved

me



-AviBaby

my sister wrote this poem and i thought it was really good for like 1 of the only poems she's ever written so i posted it =O tell me what you think and ill relay the thoughts to her. ^-^

Re: Because I Think I Deserve It (By: My Sister =O)

Posted: Jul 21, 2007 2:39am
by HueyYin
I thought it was rely good... somehow i even felt that this poem was picturing me :heh:

Re: Because I Think I Deserve It (By: My Sister =O)

Posted: Jul 24, 2007 8:36pm
by Master InuYasha
Good poem! Touched my poem

Re: Because I Think I Deserve It (By: My Sister =O)

Posted: Jul 27, 2007 5:56am
by demonduckofdoom
Wow! That's amazing, and the repetition is put to good use. Very sweet. ^-^

Re: Because I Think I Deserve It (By: My Sister =O)

Posted: Jul 31, 2007 2:20am
by Shaodw
was decent the repetition was kinda annoying at times :S

Re: Because I Think I Deserve It (By: My Sister =O)

Posted: Dec 22, 2007 10:11pm
by Biki
i forgot all about tbis. XD! but ill tell my sis what u all sed. >3