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My first poem in a LONG time^^

Posted: Jan 03, 2008 12:23am
by kamon
Hope you guys like it^^

The End of Cinderella

They heard her cry upon the stair
With sapphire eyes and golden hair
Skin of silk perfume so sweet
Glass slippers upon her feet
She weeps for love she does not feel
She weeps for wounds that will not heal
Weeping weeping all the night
While the stars are shining bright
Ears are deaf and hearts condemn
This poor woman’s requiem
They heard her sing of dreams and love
Of feelings people dare dream of
She’s stopped singing they don’t know why
All they do is hear her cry
Did she wake up from all her dreams?
Was all of it not just what it seems?
Maybe Charming wasn’t so
After all she didn’t know
The man behind those angel eyes
Would break her trust and tell her lies
Did she even know his name?
Did she just focus on the fame?
Did she just want to get away
from scrubbing floors day after day?
Of jealous sisters stealing clothes?
Of mother ignoring constant woes?
Her reason is shown in all her tears
She has shed o’er all the years
Now she’s dancing cross the floor
Though the music’s there no more
She focuses on happy things
Of birds who’d tie her apron strings
Of mice who’d tell her “It’s okay,”
“you’ll get out of here someday.”
But now the mice and birds are gone
She has no reason for a song
Then her slippers shatter there
Her scream pierced through the evening air
The shards of that one magic night
Pierce her skin with all their might
She falls bleeding on the floor
Staring at the stars once more
The cuts are deep into her veins
Reminding her of all the pains
Her eyes are fading like the night
Though she fights with all of her might
To fight the dark embrace of death
She mutters words with her last breath
She mutters words that can not do
The magic they are supposed to
The bells toll twelve on hallowed ground
Their echoes are the only sound
That is heard across the floor
Where her song is heard no more

Re: My first poem in a LONG time^^

Posted: Jan 03, 2008 7:26am
by Rin_23
wow i think that is good!
good job :D

Re: My first poem in a LONG time^^

Posted: Jan 03, 2008 12:43pm
by kukutaru_ookami
*whistles* nice Kamon its very anti fairy tale in which it lasts a second but its a farce and then reality comes crashing down on you crushing your spirit I love work like this its much more powerful than any love junk

Re: My first poem in a LONG time^^

Posted: Jan 04, 2008 12:21am
by Seiji Sawamura
perfect. you should this around the world man

Re: My first poem in a LONG time^^

Posted: Jan 04, 2008 12:25am
by Ms. Fluffy Butt
This is beautiful... two thumbs up! :mrgreen:

Re: My first poem in a LONG time^^

Posted: Jan 04, 2008 12:26am
by Seras
Bravo! Brava! I loved it. My friend says you are very good. :)

Re: My first poem in a LONG time^^

Posted: Jan 04, 2008 10:42am
by Athos
I wish I could write like that...Ah, I'll just stick to my expertise in military, political, and legal affairs. XD

>.> Kamon, can I borrow you're writing talent for the next....4 weeks? :D

Re: My first poem in a LONG time^^

Posted: Jan 04, 2008 12:15pm
by Jade_Steel_Hawk
AMAZING talent!!!!
throws a realistic end to the story.
=D> x1000

Re: My first poem in a LONG time^^

Posted: Jan 05, 2008 4:37am
by divinephoenix
I love it! You're really talented!

Who'd thought of making a classic fairytale into a real life capatible poem!

Re: My first poem in a LONG time^^

Posted: Jan 05, 2008 9:07am
by panic!girl14
that was good i really liked it :D

Re: My first poem in a LONG time^^

Posted: Jan 05, 2008 1:43pm
by ..shuichi..
Wow. It's really good. You're very talented ^^

Re: My first poem in a LONG time^^

Posted: Jan 13, 2008 3:19am
by Eiri Yuki
Beautiful poem Kamon....and long time no see.

Re: My first poem in a LONG time^^

Posted: Jan 13, 2008 8:06am
by Pyro Psycho
Wow that is wonderful......beautiful job there Kamon!

Re: My first poem in a LONG time^^

Posted: Feb 01, 2008 3:32pm
by wolfgirl
~snap claps~very nice.kinda dark,anit-fairy tall hypocrisy(sp?)very nice.

Re: My first poem in a LONG time^^

Posted: Apr 04, 2008 11:56am
by Mz'Cherry
that is B-E-A-U-T-F-U-L. YOUR VERY GOOD :D

Re: My first poem in a LONG time^^

Posted: Jul 02, 2008 11:19pm
by Neko Angel
Kamon-sama, that was amazing! I almost cried. That was a very beautiful poem. I loved it (if you couldn't tell already =^.^=)!