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the one (a poem 18+ version)

Posted: Jul 29, 2005 12:09am
by Mistress of Yaoi
The one

I lie awake at night staring at that cieling,
All I can think about is the one that hurt me,
The one that left this scar deep indside me,
I wish i could forget the kindness,
The warmth that took my innoscence,
And has now left me cold,
For then these memories would not be so painful,
Pain without these memories would it all just go away,
Thats what I think everytime I take a sip from my glass,
For you see I left my heart bleeding at his door.

re: the one (a poem 18+ version)

Posted: Jul 30, 2005 12:37am
by ANGEL OF HELL
good! very good! kudos!

re: the one (a poem 18+ version)

Posted: Aug 01, 2005 8:33pm
by kamon
...dark, powerful, simply astounding. This an excellent piece of work. Tell me if you come up with anything else.

re: the one (a poem 18+ version)

Posted: Aug 01, 2005 9:05pm
by ♥DIVA♥
kamon! *nuge* *nuge* you should put your work to the puplic too. ^_^

re: the one (a poem 18+ version)

Posted: Aug 01, 2005 9:06pm
by ♥DIVA♥
oh sorry to be rude. i thought that its was increadibly sublime. great work

re: the one (a poem 18+ version)

Posted: Aug 01, 2005 9:23pm
by kamon
I have Karasu, it's been on there for about three days

re: the one (a poem 18+ version)

Posted: Aug 01, 2005 9:57pm
by ♥DIVA♥
WHAT! where!!!

re: the one (a poem 18+ version)

Posted: Aug 10, 2005 11:43pm
by soulanubis666
nice work liz.... :mrgreen: