Absolute Anime

Here's another one, this one is nice, but I know the rhythm needs a little work... ><

My heart was broken
When you moved away
My heart was locked
And I had nothing to say

You couldn't stay
And the lock was broken
Without the key
It'd never open

You may have moved
But we keep in touch
I love you still...
It don't amount to much

You were the one
I'd stand beside
You were the one
For whom I'd die

As I sit here
Tears flowing down
I remember you, the boy
That moved out of town

I won't feel
Your lips on mine
And hopefully my feelings
Will pass with time

I had dreamed of you daily
Crying every night
Because I knew I couldn't have you
Try as I might

But you live far away now
That I can't forget
So I must turn to other things
But my mind witll not be set

Yes, I love you
This is true
You didn't know
But now you do

I loved you thn
I love you now
So please come back
To me right now.

I like it

no.
dont like it.
The whole story is screwed.
How its told is even more screwed

Could you tell me how to fix it? Or why you didn't like it? Give me some critism, some way to improve my writing, please.

I think it was beautiful! ^-^

Thanks ^^