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Bright Light (poem)

Posted: Feb 08, 2008 2:10am
by scorpionwarrior
Bright Light

What is that light I see?,
all the way down there,
oh what can it be?,
the suspense I cannot bare.

It's brighter than bright,
as I can tell,
not like a light,
I want to yell.

What I do not understand,
is why there is nothing here,
I cannot see any land,
not even a sound in my ear.

Wait, oh can it be?,
that my fate has been woven,
this light can only mean,
I have died and gone to Heaven.

Re: Bright Light (poem)

Posted: Feb 08, 2008 3:50am
by ax_colleen
Magnificent poem

Re: Bright Light (poem)

Posted: Feb 08, 2008 4:51am
by scorpionwarrior
Thanks

Re: Bright Light (poem)

Posted: Feb 08, 2008 6:35am
by Neon_Genesis
It could use a little more death and gore. Maby a little violent bondage scenes.

Re: Bright Light (poem)

Posted: Feb 08, 2008 12:35pm
by Aoi Sakuraba
I think it's wonderful Mat, good job :)

Re: Bright Light (poem)

Posted: Feb 08, 2008 3:34pm
by Kaoru Hanabishi
straight forward and short good work scorpio

Re: Bright Light (poem)

Posted: Feb 09, 2008 4:38am
by Kibsy~
Great Work, Scarpsy ^__^

Re: Bright Light (poem)

Posted: Feb 09, 2008 5:08am
by scorpionwarrior
Thanks Aoi, Kaoru and Kibs.

Re: Bright Light (poem)

Posted: Feb 10, 2008 4:48pm
by Biki
nice one scprpyz. ^-^