Metal Gear Solid repost fanfic chapters 1 and 2!

[Matt]

Metal Gear Solid:Fox's story.
Chapter 1: Revolver Ocelot.

The Ninja squatted on the cold roof of Shadow Moses Nuclear Disposal facility as he saw the genome soldiers round up the workers like sheep and put them in small rooms.The Ninja had Camoflauge,the very latest in stealth technology developed by Armstech a weapon company whom were in development of REX a Nuclear equiped bi-pedal walking battle tank.
The Ninja was Grey Fox a ex Fox-Hound Agent who had been defeated by the legendary Solid Snake at Outer Heaven several years ago.Snake had watched Fox die but a DR. revived Fox using sedatives and bonding him to a Exoskeloton.Fox saw across the Helipad a Black cladded figure on the tiny elevator come up.It was him.Solid Snake.He hadn't aged well,the ever cold look in his soul less eyes.Fox watched him take out a Sentry with ease hiding the Limp-necked guard behind a stack of neatly piled boxes.Snake had craweled in a Air duct,which was Cliche in Fox's eyes but Snake knew how to do it.

"What the hell!?!" a voice called as Fox looked down a guard had spotted him.He had got restless and taken off his camo.Thinking on quick reactions Fox leapt off the roof drawing his HF-Blade aiming at the guard.Slicing down and with a Large thud Fox's feet hit the floor.Blood sprayed from the chest of the sentry as the Snow turned from a pure white to a Fiendish Red before sneaking inside.

Inside Fox stuck to his stealth camo when he saw a huge room with two M1
tanks inside.4 Sentries were patroling the area but Fox could get to the Elevator which he just saw Snake enter.Fox sprinted across the floor making tiny sounds with his heels as they hit the cold surface before getting inside the elevator.After Going through the Armoury Fox saw a Square shaped room with a pillar in the centre with the president of Armstech Kenneth Baker.Around him were Semtex C4 attached to wire.Snake was thier panting his back pressed against a wall as if in a gunfight.He was.A second Man could be seen a lot older than Snake with Grey hair and dressed in desert Camos he held a revolver in his right hand.Slowly the Man spun around
aiming the gun at Snake's heart.Fox lept at the Old Man slicing with his Katana as a Fleshy cut could be heard.The Old Man just stood there as his hand slowly slid off his wrist into a bloody puddle on the floor

"MY HAND!" screamed the Man in a suprised voice.

The Man held his arm trying to stop the bleeding as he saw Fox come out of his Optic camoflague.
"Optic camouflague?!?" He cried grabbing his hand which still held the revolver.Before turning to Snake he said.
"You were lucky We'll Meet again!"

Chapter-2 Fox finds Otacon.
Fox made it into the snow field.He had watched Snake talk to the Old man of Armstech who had a heart attack.Now his thermal vision picked up several mines which he dodged with ease.A M-1 tank was at the end of the snowfield.Flicking his Stealth Fox snuck past the Metal killing Machine.Fox knew it was for Snake so he opened the Door behind the tank.He was finally inside the Nuclear facility.Now Fox had to be careful because if he fired off any Weapons the whole place would become a Nuclear Explosion site.
Three guards were patrolling.They wore different Uniforms Yellow all in ones with Gas-Masks.They still had their guns but by the looks of things when the alarm was sounded toxic gas seeped into the Building suffocating any intruders.Fox lept up the stairs narrowly missing a Guard.Hitting the Elevator button the doors opened with a "Ping."Fox eneterd the elevator and watched a Guard walk past as the doors shut.Fox thought about where Snake was now.He should have destroyed the M-1 no problem.He had beat Metal Gear twice now,so a Milatary tank would be no porblem for Snake.

As the doors opened with another "Ping." There was a long corridoor,with two problems.There was a Panel along the floor and live jolts were dancing along it.Next there was a Gas in the room but that was no problem for Fox
as he could breath in his helmet.He decided to Cross Jump on the walls hoping they wouldn't open.He dropped his Key-card he found off a Guard he killed in the Heliport.Fox positioned himself like a Tiger about to pounce.He lept hitting the Door.it was LV3,Fox would have fried.
Fox kept pouncing in a diagonal direction until he got to the other side.Hopefully Snake would do it a easier way....

When Fox enterd a door he saw several Genome soldiers patrolling.He wasn't in stealth so a Genome Solider spotted him.

"hey what the hell?!?" the Soldier Shouted.

Fox Lept back hitting the stealth going invisible.The Guard fired wildly into the air as Fox deflected the bullets with ease with his Katana.Fox lunged forwar punching the guard with his left fist,winding the guard.

"Oof!" the guard puffed.

Then Fox span around placing the Katana through the Soldiers gut Blood spraying out of the back as a Silvery red blade appered slowly.The Guard fell backwards hitting the floor with a thud.Fox ran at the other guards,kneeing one in the face with a loud CRACK ashe slit the throat swiftly.A third guard saw this firing into the air missing as well.Fox grabbed his head and repetadly smashed his head into a wall until a large dent appered with Blood slowly trickiling down it.The guard was dead.Fox kicked the fourth guard in the air slicing him in half his Intestines visible as his bottom and top half seperated.The Fianl Guard Ran out of ammo.Backing into the wall he started to shake violenty as Fox became visible Red all over his once Grey Helmet.The Guard got up and ran at Fox with a Knife.Fox grabbed the arm which held the Knife twisting it until a Snap could be heard as Fox gently placed the Katana into the Guard's stomach lifting off the air above his head.

"It's a Ghost." The Guard mutterd quietly.

Fox let him slip off the sword Kicking the guard into a wall as a massive dent called seen and the guard scrwamed as his last breath was breathed.Fox saw a door and using his Katana he destrotyed the locking mechanism.There Fox enetred a Lab where a row of super computers could be seen.There a scientist could be seen.The one Snake was looking for.Fox lept at him as the Scientist was alerted and backed into a locker.
"Where is my friend..."

[Captain Corkscrew]

Matt,

That was an extremely good read. It was really good, you just have some little things you have to fix. I know that most of them have to do with the words "a, an". You just got to use an more than a sometimes cause you need it. I'm not trying to be mean, I'm just trying to help. It was extremely good though (see I know grammar, but I just can't spell worth anything. So all in all, I would like to read the next chapter.