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Rekindled Feelings...

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Motoko Chan
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Rekindled Feelings...

Post by Motoko Chan »

So Naive
are these feelings
feelings rekindled
feelings of joy
feelings of liveliness
feelings of cluelessness
feelings of hope
they are mine lone
mine to hone
to cherish
and to make a memory
But,like the fire
there are also rekindled feelings
feelings of hatred and distrust,
feelings of endless desire
feelings of futileness

the only feeling I have left to hone...
is love..
love for another,love for the family
loving of friends.
I need to rekindle these feelings,too...
but for now,I let my feelings fly
in my actions
in my eyes
you can see them
these rekindled feelings....
Last edited by Motoko Chan on Oct 26, 2007 9:11pm, edited 1 time in total.
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vengeance
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Re: Rekindled Feelings...

Post by vengeance »

nice, you could make it into a song. :) i like your spirit in the poem, however i think that you might make it better by using some synonyms. a few more unusual words in place of common words like hate, hopelessness, despair. i think that would add a lot. good job. :)
men, ya love em ya hate em.
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