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Aoi Sakuraba
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stories (graphic content)
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Last edited by Aoi Sakuraba on Jan 27, 2009 7:23pm, edited 3 times in total.
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Kaoru Hanabishi
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Re: stories (graphic content)
It's a great story hun, the descriptions are very detailed to the point that the audience able to tell what is exactly happening without seeing pictures. The story itself is not too long either, short but yet it fits together perfectly without dragging too long.
The scene of the story of the story adds to the excitement too as at any time the girls could get discovered and yet it happened. Your very good at using words to describe things hun.
I like it!
P.S. come on people I see views increase but no comment. we all adults no need to be shy to comment.
The scene of the story of the story adds to the excitement too as at any time the girls could get discovered and yet it happened. Your very good at using words to describe things hun.
I like it!
P.S. come on people I see views increase but no comment. we all adults no need to be shy to comment.
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The Evil Russell Crowe
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Re: stories (graphic content)
That made me almost p*ss myself with laughter no offense
I see a little silhouetto of a man...
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scorpionwarrior
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Re: stories (graphic content)
You are an Extremely talented story writer, Very good and Very detailed. Great job ^__^
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Blue Haired Jesus
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Re: stories (graphic content)
Impressive, the imagery paints a portrait of exactaly what's going on. I also like that you avoided a lot of slang words commonly used in stories like this. Good job.
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Aoi Sakuraba
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Re: stories (graphic content)
Thanks a bunch BHJ and Kaoru and Scorp, I appreciate the compliments, I tried my best to stay away from vulgar descriptive words.....I guess because it seemed to take away from the romance....not sure if I succeeded.
(*Bleach 101 ARMY*) - General 陸軍大将 Rikugun Taishō (****)
Tell me Nana, why isnt forgetting about our mistakes and wounds enough to make them disappear? Even now I keep calling your name. Despite my pain, I'll keep on doing that until you answer me.
Tell me Nana, why isnt forgetting about our mistakes and wounds enough to make them disappear? Even now I keep calling your name. Despite my pain, I'll keep on doing that until you answer me.
Re: stories (graphic content)
Very tasteful for this sort of thing
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Blue Haired Jesus
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Re: stories (graphic content)
I'd consider it a success, the absence of vulgar words really did make a difference.Aoi Sakuraba wrote:Thanks a bunch BHJ and Kaoru and Scorp, I appreciate the compliments, I tried my best to stay away from vulgar descriptive words.....I guess because it seemed to take away from the romance....not sure if I succeeded.
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Kaoru Hanabishi
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Re: stories (graphic content)
yea i agree with BHJ, it is rare to see stories like this without vulgar words it makes it more convincing i think. Unlike some people just do "I wanna this and that you etc..."
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Re: stories (graphic content)
here grab my testicles and like the roman testify you btch.Kaoru Hanabishi wrote:yea i agree with BHJ, it is rare to see stories like this without vulgar words it makes it more convincing i think. Unlike some people just do "I wanna this and that you etc..."
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Kaoru Hanabishi
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Re: stories (graphic content)
it was a good story and though i didn't quite agree with the topic (i was forced to read this upon demand), it was well written. the absence of vulgarity does add to the compliment.
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Re: stories (graphic content)
WOW!!!! my g/f can write some good hentai, but DAMN!!!!..................thats the best ive seen in a while..............err....screw it, thats the best hentai ive read in a long time...................just dont tell anyone aboout it, i just recently turned 18......Name: Tucker
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Aoi Sakuraba
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Re: stories (graphic content)
thank you all for the compliments, and for all of you who did enjoy reading I'll be posting another in a few days.....thanks again
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Tell me Nana, why isnt forgetting about our mistakes and wounds enough to make them disappear? Even now I keep calling your name. Despite my pain, I'll keep on doing that until you answer me.
Tell me Nana, why isnt forgetting about our mistakes and wounds enough to make them disappear? Even now I keep calling your name. Despite my pain, I'll keep on doing that until you answer me.
Re: stories (graphic content)
Looking forward to it.
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Re: stories (graphic content)
[ghetto]Daamn, thas some hawt [censored] right there.[/ghetto] XD
Though seriously, Aoi, you need to explore that writing ability you have..it's very good. I'll admit it does need a little work, but you really can put thoughts down on paper and make them flow like all the femme juices that came in this one.. (Gah, the puns, they burn!) But yeah, keep it up Aoi. Iz veddy veddy hawt..
Though seriously, Aoi, you need to explore that writing ability you have..it's very good. I'll admit it does need a little work, but you really can put thoughts down on paper and make them flow like all the femme juices that came in this one.. (Gah, the puns, they burn!) But yeah, keep it up Aoi. Iz veddy veddy hawt..