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Lips Like a Vampire (Poetry)

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Neko Angel
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Lips Like a Vampire (Poetry)

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I would like criticism on this, please.^_^

Lips Like a Vampire

Eyes like ocean and eyes like ice
Hair like silk and hair like midnight
Arms like a sanctuary and arms like angels' wings
Chest like a rock and chest like a shield
Voice like chocolate and voice like honey
Sweet, sweet personality
Touch like a whisper, touch like fire
Enticing like dance
Tormenting like pain
Graceful like music
Addictive like morphine
Gentle like a breeze
Terrifying like love
Intriguing as insanity
Crazy as obsession
Eyes like ocean and eyes like ice
Hair like silk and hair like midnight
Arms like a sanctuary and arms like angels' wings
Chest like a rock and chest like a shield
Voice like chocolate and voice like honey
Enticing like a dance
Mesmerizing like music
Dangerous like intrigue
Crazy as obsession
Deadly like love
Lips like a vampire
The difference between men and women: Men need a manual to understand women. And then, they still don't understand us.
Hold your head high, heavy heart
Master:Kamon
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