How would you rate this poem?

[Angel of Music]

On a scale of 1-10, rate this poem honestly.

Title:Rejection and Desperation

He calls five times a day
Trying to get me to answer
Or hoping to find a way
To get me to let my wall down
So I can pity his false tears
Calling, calling, never ceasing,
I will never forgive him,
I'll just ignore him,
Doesn't he know the despair
He has caused to my heart?
Calling, calling as if someone was there,
But I won't answer
Cause I don't care
Just like he didn't care

???What do you think???

[MoonlightRose Kurama]

10.It is good!I love it.

[Angel of Music]

Thank you.

[Hamlet]

Very nice!
& Whether you intended it to be such a way or not, that poem can easily fall under women empowerment.
However, if he really calls so much, 'twould probably be best to just block his number...

[josh]

I give it a 10 as it seems original and well-written. But it's missing a question mark (?).

wub!

[Smileycute_Kagome]

i'll give u 10 coz i luv it!!!!

[MoonlightRose Kurama]

More!

[Angel of Music]

Ok. How about this one:

Title:Chained Desires

I wish I could
Discard my chain,
Uncage my heart
And dust it off.
Someone release me
From my bottle
My nightmare, my pain
Is forever, eternal.
Until the love
I have searched for,
With much hinderance
I shalt wallow
In my sorrow
Until my savoir
Does rescue me.

It's an old one, but I edited it.

[MoonlightRose Kurama]

Ok. How about this one:

Title:Chained Desires

I wish I could
Discard my chain,
Uncage my heart
And dust it off.
Someone release me
From my bottle
My nightmare, my pain
Is forever, eternal.
Until the love
I have searched for,
With much hinderance
I shalt wallow
In my sorrow
Until my savoir
Does rescue me.

It's an old one, but I edited it.

I love it!

[Angel of Music]

Thank you. Im not that good, but Im working on my skills.

[Baka-Tenshi]

They're both great poems Shinzoluver! I liked both of them very much, the ryming was very good, and the flow of it was very nice as well. I give it a 10. ^_^

[High Priest Seto]

omg the 1st one sounds as if the guy was me =S i feel sad now i wanna cry

[Angel of Music]

Don't be sad. I was relating to my own guy problems. I wasn't trying to pin anybody for the same thing. I was just siphoning my anger into poetry. Imgood at that, just not at writing how I feel without alot of foul language, and I shouldn't be putting colorful metaphors like that into poetry.

[High Priest Seto]

hehehe i'm all happy now

[Hamlet]

Ok. How about this one:

Title:Chained Desires

I wish I could
Discard my chain,
Uncage my heart
And dust it off.
Someone release me
From my bottle
My nightmare, my pain
Is forever, eternal.
Until the love
I have searched for,
With much hinderance
I shalt wallow
In my sorrow
Until my savoir
Does rescue me.

It's an old one, but I edited it.

In response to this....

If you wait for him, Love will come to you,
But if you’re enshelled he shan’t be able to reach...
He couldn’t help, for there’s nothing he can do,
To even be heard he would need to screech...
So, in place of thinking on of your wish for Love,
Take your head out of the clouds up above,
And actually think about what you need to do,
For the only one who can save you is you...

[~Yamiko~]

I give both Hamlet and shinzo a 10!!!