Who would do it?

[Dersin]

Who would do it?
I wouldn't put my hands on a woman.
I would never cross that line.
2 me thats just a sign, thats I would never put my manly hand on any woman.
My mother was abused by a man, just because she wouldn't go 2 church with him.
Who would do it?
Cross that line and you know blow it.
Lost all respect for man kind.
Come and fight me I'll give you a piece of my time and my mind.
Who would do it?

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[Dersin]

Please give me your opinion on my poem.

[Captain Corkscrew]

It's a nice poem hun, but you should work on your spelling. I had some trouble reading some words. Still, ncie poem all the same ^^

[kukutaru_ookami]

practice what ya preach pixie lady lol ^^ tis a good poem with something very serious that's a horrible line to cross, I would personally hit a wife beter with a bat, sound too harsh..too bad

[Captain Corkscrew]

Blow it out yer ear you bum! He's right though, woman beaters are evil vial and the lowest form of a man. Petiphiles are still worse though... Not even inmates in a jail like petiphiles... I know, my grandfather was a correctional officer. Still, nice message and only the scum of man kind would do such a thing.

[Dersin]

Hey thanks 4 backing me up do u have any poems.

[Violin_Melodies♥15]

I love the poem..and totally agree...those men are lower than dirt...keep up the good work Dersin...me and my friends write a few poems here and there..suck as : Painful Fear...Please...Is it possible?...and Stargazers...the last three are on page two of the forum I think..*shrugs*....anyway I still love your poem...

[Pink Supervisor|EL]

um if you read the second line all by its elf its seems kinda un male like...well straight male atleast...

[Lil' Biki]

i liked it. and i have a few poems on here. titles: scan the pages urself there 2 many 4 me 2 remember. under lil' biki tho.

[Nanashi]

I really liked this poem a lot man. And being a gentleman I would never be able to bring myself to do that to a woman. Plus part of my own code of honor involves NEVER NEVER hit women and NEVER NEVER disrespect women. I'm glad someon wrote this. Peace out.

[Biki]

u always say peace out. do u ever go anywhere? and i like ur code of honor.

[Nanashi]

Well Lil Biki, what I mean is something to the effect of go in peace or something like that. Thanks for the comment on my code of honor, and that isn't all of it the rest is:
Never fight for the recognition
Never start a fight
Fight only to protect your friends, family or the woman (Or in your case, man) you love
Fight to protect those weaker than you should they be in a fight
and last:
NEVER NEVER hit women
NEVER NEVER disrespect women.

[Dersin]

I'm going to right another 1 soon.