Torn

Ethereal Blaze · Post by **Ethereal Blaze** » Oct 23, 2005 10:56am

Torn

Ripped in two,
A friendship divided,
A third caught in its crevasse.
On his right,
An old friend,
Who no longer voices her youthful optimism.
To his left,
The new girl,
Who, at first glance,
Appears as confused as he.
Is she the cause of this problem?
As he sits,
Contemplating in his room,
His heart,
Mind,
And relationship,
Is torn into uncollectible fragments.

Free · Post by **Free** » Oct 23, 2005 10:58am

xD
I loved it! It has such emotion and big words. That always makes things a bit more interesting...

Biki · Post by **Biki** » Oct 23, 2005 10:58am

i won't vote, cuz u don't have a choice i agree w/. but that was amazing. that was truly good. wow. just wow. big fan of poetry here.

just amazing. keep writing kid.

Althea · Post by **Althea** » Oct 23, 2005 11:22am

mate, your poem is good hu's it about a friend or you

Ethereal Blaze · Post by **Ethereal Blaze** » Oct 23, 2005 11:25am

its about both. but its sorted now ^_^

Althea · Post by **Althea** » Oct 23, 2005 11:35am

good good. keep it up, its a
wicked poem

Biki · Post by **Biki** » Oct 23, 2005 11:37am

that's great rikoku. really great. glad 2 hear it.

Gypsy · Post by **Gypsy** » Oct 23, 2005 11:41am

OMG it is sooooo good

I wish i could do poems like dat!

It is good you have done it based on real life ay? *cough cough*

Bambi · Post by **Bambi** » Oct 23, 2005 12:38pm

Gypsy wrote:OMG it is sooooo good I wish i could do poems like dat!
It is good you have done it based on real life ay? *cough cough*

Obviously.

He stated that it was.
Cabbage

no comment for your poetry mate.

Ethereal Blaze · Post by **Ethereal Blaze** » Oct 23, 2005 12:47pm

actually, my poems are usually bease on my emotions, not real things ^_^

Biki · Post by **Biki** » Oct 23, 2005 1:03pm

sweety ur emotions r real things. they r not based on real experiences is what u mean.

Bambi · Post by **Bambi** » Oct 23, 2005 1:13pm

False Information -_-.

Ethereal Blaze · Post by **Ethereal Blaze** » Oct 23, 2005 1:14pm

what lil biki said. i just got confused

Biki · Post by **Biki** » Oct 23, 2005 2:06pm

it's ok.

Captain Corkscrew · Post by **Captain Corkscrew** » Oct 23, 2005 2:14pm

Cool poem bro, I do try and read all yah got ta offer... You know and I knw... i take a lil bit to ger there... but I always make it. Man, I've had soooo many friend related fights... I don't have enough apendages to keep count on anymore...lol It was thweety kins bro! Thwee-tey kan-z! I wuv it just like I wuv all your work.

Motoko Chan · Post by **Motoko Chan** » Oct 23, 2005 2:27pm

Wow,great job!

Torn

D'ya like the poem?

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