Homunculus

[Nathan~Chevalier]

Homunculus...


We are lost souls from beyond the dark...

we have been hurt and abandon...

by the ones we loved the most...

our hearts crave to move...

our minds crave for revenge...

our bodys crave the blood...

The blood that made us grow...

the revenge that grew in our minds...

for the numbness in our hearts...

Though we came from sin...

and were sin itself...

dont think of us as evil...

because remember...

we are made by the sinner...

to represent their mistake...

and their lost dreams...

So remember the next time you think...

that we are mearly created things...





( This is the closest thing ive ever done that comes close to a poem so give me your opinion for my first poem )

[Nathan~Chevalier]

srry about the poll it came out wrong.

[Pyrokinetic Singer]

It's okay.It's pretty good for your first poem.

[Sasami Jurai]

It's good! Excellent! You have Homunculi spirit!

[Pyrokinetic Singer]

It is REALY good!

[Pyro Psycho]

this is great...........Wow XD its excellent!!! Good job. and so truthful ^^ Keep it up

[≈ Kªrdis Ω]

Very Good. You write from deep inside. I tip my hat to you ^.~

[Nathan~Chevalier]

thank you all

[♥DIVA♥]

omg! i read it. i loved it!
you dont mind if i print it out and put it on my wall do you?

[Nathan~Chevalier]

Of course not.

Are you being truthfull or sarcastic.

[♥DIVA♥]

truthful lol. honey i dont need sarcasm.

[Shining Star]

I love it!!!! It rocks like seriously it is really cool print me out a copy and give it to me at school ok? please I want to put it in my locker!!!

[♥DIVA♥]

oh good idea!

[AngelBlaze]

Your poems really cool

[Eiri Yuki]

Excellent job hun.......write more.

[Mrs. Vengeance]