A Poem: Friends

[Mew Vanilla]

Friends

I thought we were friends
But you didn't give a d***
You don't understand who I am
It was just a mistake
And now you take
All of me away
But that's okay
You can't play
Me cuz that ain't me
You can try to take me down
But I'm not going down
Not without a fight
It'll go down tonight
Now I see how you are
You're not true
You try to make me blue
But that ain't happening no more
I don't trust you
Like I used too
F*** you
I'm not trying to be mean
But you shouldn't have played me
You're not better than me
Even if you have more money
Go to hell
When you do I'll tell
I wouldn't give a s***
You D***
N**** I don't like you
You better check
Yourself before you wreck yourself
You A******
Now you ain't my friend anymore
You were mean
Now I ain't trying to be mean
But ya'll see what I see

[GravyTrain]

I think a lot of the lines could be combined to cut this poem in half (lenghtwise). The 'three words every line' style makes it irritatingly choppy to read.

[Sasami Jurai]

I love your poem.

[josh]

I dont take a liking to this. I found it boring, kinda spiritless. Umm, dont know how to explain...just wasn't my thing. Soz