Obus the samurai king.episode 2 out

[Ocean9ty]

Hey guys i just posted episode 2 of my my dialogue manga,obus the samurai king. Go check it obusanime.blogspot.com. Episode 2 is something else.tel me what you tink.

[Tyche]

You got the spelling right, but the grammar is terri-bad. (lack of proper punctuation, capitalization, etc.)

All you make your characters do is talk in nonsensical way. You don't include a background story to it, no narration other than "At so and so's house", no description of scenery or characters, no descriptive emotional ques {ex: Aoho: (through gritted teeth): Mandi, you don't deserve to live, only to die)}

You need to include every detail if you are writing a script. Otherwise you need to simply make a story, as in, with sentences instead of just quotes.

I suggest to you this: http://www.wikihow.com/Write-a-Script