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Angel of Music
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Heartbroken

Post by Angel of Music »

Here's another poem! :mrgreen:

Title:Heartbroken

He asked me to dance
And he didn't come back,
He said I was cute,
Yet he said that to
Ten other girls too.
Now Im heartbroken,
As I sit in my car,
I think about why he did that
Did I really deserve that?
A bird with a broken wing,
Has to learn to fly again,
But how am I to heal or trust?
How can I fly?
Who will lift me and be the wind beneath my wings?
Who will help me fly again?
The answer is simple,
It stares me in the face,
The only answer is me.
I am the wind, I must be alone, I must fly on my own.
But how?

What do you think?
Chaos Flame
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re: Heartbroken

Post by Chaos Flame »

pretty good
Motoko Chan
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re: Heartbroken

Post by Motoko Chan »

I like the way you leave people guessing.It makes it a better poem.
Cross your legs and smile!
Angel of Music
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re: Heartbroken

Post by Angel of Music »

Thanks. :mrgreen:
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