Agony

[SASSZAIN]

This is just something I wrote. Dunno what it means, just know i wrote it. I'm posting it here `cause i kinda have nothing better to do right now so yeah xD;;

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Agony:

Love and Hate. Both are tributes to life and its inquisitions of our souls.

Let now be the end.
Time undone.
When all breaks loose.
Chaos ensues.
Life dissipates.
Mortals suffer.
Emotions perish.
Death arrives.

The dark light comes, to destroy the living for The living bring the white light, that casts out the darkness.

Let now be the beginning.
Time starts.
When bonds are created.
Chaos settles.
Life spawns.
Mortals grow.
Emotions flourish.
Death cowers.

Life and Death. Two in one. Life without death is not life, but being. Thus death without life is meaningless.

Let now be the story.
Time flows
When events take place.
Chaos happens.
Life changes.
Mortals learn.
Emotions flicker.
Death creeps.
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Yeeeeah well thats about it. Tell me what you think I guess. xD;

[maria]

Your poem is very choppy. As in it flows from short statement to short statement in a jarring way. Not saying thats bad at all... also the repition is nice

[Meghan]

It's okay...Like Maria said it's choppy.

[SASSZAIN]

lol YaY its crappy!! *Note: I think everything i make is crappy. How I improve.

Vut yesh. the cho[[y i noticed too and was like "Why is that there?" Then realized "Why the heck am i even writing this? Meh better not to ask myself about it" xD;;

[Furious Fister!]

its like every emo angst poem out there, and its pretty boring i stop reading like halfway through.

[Demyx]

I think its good. Its kind of thoughtful, even if you didn't mean it that way. and the short sentences jar the reader in a way that makes a pattern. its subtle, yet disguised. I think its really good, despite what others say.

[SASSZAIN]

I think its good. Its kind of thoughtful, even if you didn't mean it that way. and the short sentences jar the reader in a way that makes a pattern. its subtle, yet disguised. I think its really good, despite what others say.

Yah know what freaks me out?

I think my subconcious was going for tyhat effect when i wrote it.

its like every emo angst poem out there, and its pretty boring i stop reading like halfway through.

Thank you. Opinion Noted. Placed in file 13. thanks for playing. come again soon.

[Furious Fister!]

its like every emo angst poem out there, and its pretty boring i stop reading like halfway through.

Thank you. Opinion Noted. Placed in file 13. thanks for playing. come again soon.

ur so mature 4 reacting that way to honest criticism.

[SASSZAIN]

Any other opinions? From people who read the whole thing i mean.

[Pyro Psycho]

It's really good. Aww it's kinda sad and all too true. Nice tie up with life. You made me think though

[SASSZAIN]

It's really good. Aww it's kinda sad and all too true. Nice tie up with life. You made me think though

thanks I like to make people think. Its better for their health xD

[Furious Fister!]

Any other opinions? From people who read the whole thing i mean.

i did read the whole thing, i was just kidding.

[SASSZAIN]

Didnt seem likea joke. Usualy jokes are followed by laughter from more than one party., I saw no laughter, and it appeared as rude. Try adding this smple emote " " or "j/k" or something. : / otherwise you come off as rude. Anyways, thats off topic.
So its like every other emo agnst poem out there. Meh. Its supposed to be about life. If Life is emo then well, i guess thats that XD lifeis what it is and there is no changing what is, only what shall be.