Zero Noise (story)

[scorpionwarrior]

Finished the prologue.


Prologue: an Introduction of the Squad.

My name is Razor, I am part of the elite assassin squad Zero Noise. Our code names are given to us by describing what we specialize in. My specialty is taking enemies out with a wide variety of lethal ranged weapons, but I am just as dangerous up close. Enough about me, I'm sure you're wondering about my squad, or i should say Hunter's squad. Hunter is our leader, He got that name because he's a master of capture and interrogation. He's the last person you will ever want chasing you, the day you have him on your trail is they day you meet your maker as he is as ruthless as he is cunning. Next is Scythe. Scythe has mastered near every close combat weapon known to man.... everything from knives and daggers to swords and spears. Now for the last guy, his name is Shadow. Why shadow? Shadow's skill in stealth and recon is unrivaled. He can move through shadows without being seen and is very stealthy, but he is also as mysterious as the shadows. I believe that's everyone.........

“Hey Razor, hurry up!”

“Alright Hunter, coming. We've just received orders and we are to eliminate one of the Universes most dangerous and smartest gangs “The Blazing Scorpions”. They are very tough and very smart, and they also seem ready for anything. We haven't managed to get much intel on them, but it should be as easy as any other mission. Anyway gotta go”.

[Aoi Sakuraba]

I said I'd help you Mat so here is how I'd write it

My name is Razor, I am part of the elite assassin squad Zero Noise. Our code names are given to us by describing what we specialize in. My specialty is taking enemies out with a wide variety of lethal ranged weapons, but don't underestimate my close combat skills or you'll end up dead at my feat. Enough about me, I'm sure you're curious about my squad and what makes them so special. Hunter is our leader, Hunter never lets his prey escape he's a master of capture and interrogation. He's the last person you will ever want chasing you, the day you have him on your trail is they day you meet your maker as he is as ruthless as he is cunning.
Next is Scythe. Scythe has mastered near every close combat weapon known to man.... everything from knives and daggers to swords and spears. Now last but far from least is Shadow. Shadow's skill in stealth and recon is unrivaled, he can move throughout the night without making a singe sound. I believe that's everyone.........

“Razor, hurry up!”

“Okay Hunter, I'm on my way"
"We've just received a mission, we are to eliminate the The Blazing Scorpions gang. They are extremely dangerous and considered a thread to the stability of the universe. Do not take these guys lightly or you will die today. We have orders to shoot to kill, no quarter. We have little to no intelligence on them so watch yourselves!"

[scorpionwarrior]

It's really good, except for some stuff as I told you already. But thanks you've helped inspire me back into writing the rest of it(I was kinda stuck with what to write)

(edit) Also If someone could help me start off chapter one, I would be very grateful.

[Aoi Sakuraba]

I'd be more then happy to help you Mat but you'll have to tell me what kind of things you want done....I don't want to write a full chapter and have you not like it, then all my work would be meaningless

[scorpionwarrior]

oh no, I just need help with starting, I don't wanna start with "one day" or anything like that. >.<, lol

[Jade_Steel_Hawk]

I'm a pretty good writer.
If ya want my help, I'm around a lot.

[scorpionwarrior]

Sure if you like.

Just so everyone knows I may not like ALL of the story. But remember that if I add any parts of a chapter that anyone writes, I will be very thankful and YOU are making the story better.

I have finished with the prologue and I have added parts of what you wrote Aoi, Thank you, I will update it now.

This is chapter 1 so far:

Chapter 1: A bright beginning

A light is shining bright, and yet there is nothing anywhere. There is a strange feeling, a feeling of emptiness, like all life has been sucked from the world.......

“Hmmmmm, what's that light? It's so bright..... where is it coming from”?
“Razor”....
“Who said that”?
“Oi Razor”....
“huh”?
RAZOR WAKE UP!!!!
ahhhhhh! “Don't do that Scythe”.
“About time, did you forget we have training, or did you want to just stay there dreaming about bright lights”?
“Oh-no I didn't did I”?
“Yes, you were talking in your sleep again”.
“Oh man I hate that”.
“You better hurry up and get ready, you have got 10 minutes”.
“Ok, you go I'll catch up”

And with that Scythe leaves. Razor still not being able to comprehend his dream, frantically gets ready. While getting ready he notices something is missing from his desk. He stops for a little while to try and figure out what it is.

I'm sure that something is missing, but what?
“Oh no! I'm gonna be late”

[Kaoru Hanabishi]

your doing well, keep up the good work scorpio